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With regards to character motivation and goals, there are the character's internal goals that may be included in the plot backstory. But the character also has an external goal. In the case of breaking bad, the character's internal goals are driven by the fact that he has cancer, is cash-poor and needs a quick way to provide for the long term financial security of his family. His external every day goal however is much different. These goals transform this character from a standup guy with morals and values to compromising his values for the sake of his family.
Select a character from a book, play, movie or tv show and describe the internal and external goals that drive the main character. Do these goals transform the character over time?
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1. Clear logline that includes hero (protagonist), goal and obstacle.
2. Backstory gives the audience an idea of the hero's life up until the beginning of the conflict.
3. Character is well presented, we understand hero's internal and external goals and how these goals may transform the character as the character faces challenges within the overall plot.
4. Conflict is presented with clarity.
In the show, Psych, a man with extraordinary observation skills uses his talents to be the head "psychic" of the Santa Barbara Police Department. Frequently, he uses his talents as a way to earn a paycheck because he previously was unemployed. This is his outer motivation, whereas his inner motivation is ultimately to make his father, an ex-cop, proud and to start a new chapter in his life.
ReplyDeleteGatsby from The Great Gatsby wants to become rich and win over Daisy, and these goals transformed him greatly as he became an entirely new person, from a poor farm boy to a rich bootlegger.
ReplyDeleteIn my story the protagonist's internal motivation is to spread his father's ashes in poland, his external motivation is to survive in Nazi occupied Poland. the protagonist's internal goal fuels his external goal: survival.
ReplyDeleteWoody in Toy Story wants to return home to his kid Andy but on the inside he wants to kill Buzz, then he realizes he doesn't and they become bff's on the way home.
ReplyDeleteIn the tv series Suits, the protagonist, Mike, is given the opportunity to become a better man. He has some internal and external goals and he wants to better himself in the world of suits as he previously had affiliations with drugs. He also wants to please his boss of the law firm because Harvey , his boss, helped Mike in ways not everyone could do. They definitely transform the character as Mike transforms into a more genuine character.
ReplyDeleteMike Ross is driven by many things in the show Suits. Internally he is driven by a love for his girlfriend, and a need to redeem himself from getting expelled from law school. He is also driven by wanting to do the right thing, and this often gets him in trouble at Pearson Specter, his law firm. Externally, he is driven to do his best by his boss, Harvey Specter, his girlfriend, and senior partners at the firm, Jessica Pearson and Louis Litt. He has changed a lot from his pot-smoking, test-cheating self in season one, to a responsible adult in season 3.
ReplyDeleteFrom Lord of the Rings, Frodo Baggins is a young Hobbit from the Shire who unfortunately becomes the owner of the most powerful object in Middle Earth. When given the Ring by Gandalf his external goal becomes destroying the ring for the good of man kind, but as he holds the ring for longer periods of time it begins to control him. It begins to change his goal unwillingly from destroying the ring to keeping it for himself to become all powerful. Thankfully Samwise Gamgy is there to fix that. However, his internal goals remain constant. He wants to destroy the ring to save the Shire he loves.
ReplyDeleteSpartacus's internal goal is to avenge the death of his wife and take revenge on the Roman empire for ruining his life, his external goal is to go from villa to villa and city to city and liberate all the slaves. These goals transform Spartacus from being a quiet and respectful soldier to a powerful and incredibly strategic leader breaking morals which he might have once believed in
ReplyDeleteCurrently I am reading a book called Red rising about oppression. in the story a Red(worker person who is basically a slave) is taken from his home so he can have plastic surgery to become a gold(noble high class who look down on and enslave the rest of the colors) and enter in the gold institute where we will have to win at the gold game to become a high ranking gold official. he does this so he can make changes so that the Reds have someone in power to change the way reds are treated. His inner motivation is to fight back against the golds and do what he can to take their power from them. his outer motivation so far is to finish the game within the institute and become a high ranking gold.
ReplyDeleteThe book The Kite Runner shows this internal vs. external goal. Amir's external goal is to escape Afghanistan and live in peace in the United States. Amir's internal goal is to be accepted by his father Baba. Baba lives an extravagant life and is well known and throws many parties. Although he wants to be accepted he also wants his father to understand that he is not him.
ReplyDeleteIn the book I'm reading, "Xenocide" by Orison Scott Card, Andrew Wiggin has to find a way in the long term to make peace between the Buggers, the Pequinoes, and the Humans. However in the short term Andrew has to keep his family members from ripping each other apart.
ReplyDeleteSupernatural: Sam Winchester:
ReplyDeleteSam's external goals are to save the world from impending supernatural doom, to evade the police, and to stick together with his big brother, Dean. However, his internal goals are to simply keep himself on as straight and narrow a path as possible. These goals change him over time in that he learns to compromise between his internal and external goals, instead of allowing only one or the other to drive him.
In Pirates of the Caribbean, Captain Jack Sparrow's external motivation is to regain his ship. His internal motivation is to secure his freedom on the seas without persecution of the British East India Company.
ReplyDeleteIn the movie The Dark Knight Rises, batman's internal motivation leads to a very different and original method for an external goal. To protect his city Gotham, one of the largest and most prosperous in America, as well as one of the most crime ridden. In order to both keep up his extremely rich reputation as well as protect his city, he takes to becoming a vigilante rather than the traditional route of becoming apolice officer or such. His internal motivation leads to a very illegal external goal.
ReplyDeleteIn the Perks of Being a Wallflower, the protagonist Charlie's external goal is to fit in and have friends at school. His internal goal is to get over the fact that his favorite aunt raped him while he was a little boy. he definitely transforms. He gains friends and in the end he overcomes the issue of his aunt doing that.
ReplyDeleteGatsby's only goal in The Great Gatsby is to win Daisy back. He was with her before, but they separated for a long period of time, but he still held on to her. He transforms throughout the novel and keeps fighting for her.
ReplyDeleteIn Finding Nemo, Nemo wants to prove to his dad that he is better than how his dad perceives him. Nemo wants to explore the world. His inner motivation is to make his father proud and to show that he is normal.
ReplyDeleteEnders Game, Enders external goal is to fight and become stronger in order to beat the game while his internal goal is to become better and be normal like the rest of the people and be loved by his brother and be special.
ReplyDeleteGatsby's struggled for Daisy's love, while he also fought to become rich from his origin as a poor farmer. He seemed to want Daisy because deep down he needed her for his life to have been truly successful.
ReplyDeleteIn the show Death Note, the protagonist Yagami Light, finds a book that will kill whomever is written in it. After finding this book, he goes on a quest to kill all bad people in the world. But with his extreme intelligence and overwhelming power, he starts to get swallowed by his abilities and kills anyone who tries to stop him. His goal to remove the "filth" the world transforms him to someone evil.
ReplyDeleteIn the show game of thrones one of the protagonist Rob Stark's internal motivation to fight the southern kingdoms of Westeros is to avenge is father's death, and his external goal is to overthrow the tyrant of king Joffrey.
ReplyDeleteIn The Great Gatsby, Gatsby wants to win over Daisy from Tom and be very rich. He was a poor farm boy and he is now a rich bootlegger. His character transforms through the novel and keeps trying to win back Daisy.
ReplyDeleteIn the novel Divergent, Tris's external goal is to succeed in the Dauntless headquarters and rank first through the fear simulations. Her internal goal is to prove that she can be brave and selfless at the same time, making her parents proud of her. Tris does transform over time. She realizes the power that she has, which is the power to protect others by being courageous.
ReplyDelete1.my hero is a 17 year old boy who can travel back in time to be able to change pearl harbor so it will not happen.
ReplyDelete2. he wants to do this because his granddad was a victim of the bombing of pearl harbor.
3. His internal goal were to save his grandfather but when he goes back to the now time he is presented when the united states own the whole world and the united states will not be able to have a grip of the whole world, so an internal world war breaks out.
In the Great Gatsby, Gatsby's internal struggle is to pretend he is rich, and his external is to get Daisy back.
ReplyDeleteIn The Grapes of Wrath, Tom Joad is externally motivated by the prospect of money and a nice life in California. He is internally motivated by survival and doing the right thing.
ReplyDeleteGatsby's struggled for Daisy's love, while he also fought to become rich from his origin as a poor land owner. He seemed to want Daisy because deep down he needed her for his life to have been truly successful and to be his trophy wife.
ReplyDeleteIn the movie Apollo 13, the main character's external goal is to return home safely to Earth. However, his internal goal is to bond with his shipmates and grow as a person.
ReplyDeleteSchindler from Schindler's list is pushed by social referendums installed by the Nazi regime to treat those labeled as Untermench. He is also changed by the jewish populace because he begins seeing them as fellow humans.
ReplyDeleteIn Gossip Girl, Chuck Bass's internal goals are to win over and stay with Blair, while struggling to feel like he hasn't disappointed his father, but his external goals often involve making the most money, business deals, etc. His internal goals transform his character over the episodes as he becomes a better person with more morals and kindness than before.
ReplyDeleteIn Inception, Cobb externally tries to complete the job that he is contracted to do with the memory of his wife fights against them, while internally he struggles with his inability to distinguish between his dreams and reality. His internal goals lead him to change and finally trust in his instincts and return home to his children and whether or not it is real, he believes it is.
ReplyDeleteFrom the movie Mosnters Inc, Sully finds a human girl, and he wants to take her home as soon as possible in the beginning. But he wants to stay with her after he spends some time with her, and tries not to take her home.
ReplyDeleteGatsby desired the love of Daisy and to get that he strived to become rich against the disadvantages he was born into. Gatsby's life was great until he went to war and lost the love of his life, Daisy. His internal goals are to find acceptance from others and his external goals are to live the American Dream. These conflicting goals lead to a man who is torn by the wealth which does not cover up his inner sadness.
ReplyDeleteIn Breaking Bad, Walter White faces financial instability and resorts to creating and selling meth to not only provide for his family, but to meet his personal goals. He left his former company which ended up becoming huge, while all his friends became rich, Walter White remained a chemistry teacher.
ReplyDeleteIn the book "The Great Gatsby" the protagonist Gatsby struggled for Daisy's love, while also facing the difficulty to become rich from an origin of being a farmer. Gatsby really needs Daisy in order to be successful in his life career.
ReplyDelete1. Joseph Staloni is an Italian immigrant you comes to the US during the Great Depression who seeks to create better living for his family, and gets involved in the mob because of his skills as a driver.
ReplyDelete2. He wants to be able to create a good life for his family.
3. He wants to get out of the mob taxi service.
Ted Mosby, a young New York City man searches for the perfect "one" to complete him with a little support from his four best friends in the hit comedy, How I Met Your Mother.
ReplyDeleteIn the BBC television show Sherlock, Sherlock Holmes is a man whose internal goal is to solve intricate crimes by outwitting and ultimately defeating the criminal. His external goals, however, are to prove that he is indeed smart and capable enough to beat the criminal, and this turns out to be an obsession, as Sherlock is portrayed to be a sociopath who, in a way, loves to be involved with dangerous situations. Also, another external goal is to become even better friends with his partner in crime, John Watson.
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